Monday, May 27, 2019
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To support my learning I ask you to comment as follows:
1. Something positive - something you like about what I have shared.
2. Helpful - A sentence to let us know you actually read/watched or listened to what I had to say
3. Something thoughtful - how have you connected with my learning? Give me some ideas for next time or ask me a question.
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Tālofa Cailtin. I am glad we found your posts on another blog you had created. Now that they are all in one place you can make sure you share your work with your family. This is a fantastic piece of writing. You have done the following things very weel:
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2. Different ideas arranged in paragraphs.
3. You have written ideas that are very interesting to the reader. (And a bit funny too!)
4. A a nice ending and a personal statement about your trip. Maybe you could change these around so the last part of your writing says.." It was fun in Greymouth. I want to go there again." That would finish your writing off nicely.
VERY VERY WELL DONE Caitlin.